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  • tcik the rong in my paragraph

    Hi ever one today I write paragraph with My frined and I hope to tcik the rong in myparagraph and who can completed myparagraph ؟
    My frined
    In this live more and more heppents it have .And this happents some times is good but some times it,s very bad .
    What I can write!!
    I write good happens or bad happens !!
    But the important event happened in my life is bad happen , when my frined was died !!
    This heppent is very very bad in my life ..
    I can,t write the happents in the event with out cry and be sad for my dear frined ..
    In the ten o,clock a.m in Friday I lose my friend , whrn she go to salalah and she crashed the car ..
    After died my frined , some one called me ; and said , your frined she died !!!
    When I listen who called me, I said impossible ! my friend she died , oh my Gad !!
    We belong to God and to him we return ..
    What I can write about my feeling !
    When I listen the happen I cring and I be sad along two weeks ..
    I visited friend,s family and said we belong to gad and to him we return ..
    And I sied for fried,s mother I hope to keep gad your children..
    But when I lose my friend I can,t eat and drink any things , so I be ill and I set in the hospital about 2 days
    اللهم أشفي كل مريض لا يقوى على مرضه

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    opinion 4ever

    Miss. Asia, I assume that you're a foundation year student. Try to keep abreast to reading novels "if I may say" because it would be the best friend which will find your mistakes, and if there is any help you need you just ask. However, about the mistakes you've asked the visitors to detect I myself will have to pass, because I truely believe you need boost rather than disencouragement.
    Thanks and good luck.
    التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة Sniper Fighter; الساعة 10-12-2008, 09:53 PM.
    Fear only exists in the hearts of the weak

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    • #3
      it's a nice start sweety and keep in write whenever and wherever you go

      I wish all the best 4U
      أيا معشر العشاق بالله خبروا
      إذا حل عشق بالفتى كيف يصنع
      يداري هواه ثم يكتم سره
      ويخضع في كل الأمور ويخشع

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