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  • #1

    a new face

    Salam to you all through OmAn-LoVeR

    [align=justify]Simply i was browsing the net ..... when i have remembered my days in this frum .... So my SALAM to all who has been sticking to thier promises of being active members.

    I would like to start with a simple poem I wrote yesterday. it is not that complete.... so it is my great pleasure to read your comments and opinions beneath. [/align]

    [align=center]"old love"
    You have conquered the heart of mine.
    No way to fight. No way to lie.
    I have surrended, but tell me why
    you stap too deep, you feel so high?
    Your false pride even as a sky
    in case of love poor as a fly.

    ********************************

    Through what you feel you may satisfy.
    But not for sure you can fortify
    the hardest love because it's high,
    above your dream, higher than the sky.
    For that "old love" let's say good bye.[/align]


    sa7rawi
    التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة sa7rawi; الساعة 27-07-2006, 12:14 AM.
    :crying: صحـــــــــــــراوي :crying:
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    [align=left]It’s a nice poem really

    Keep writing girl you are good at it

    The Hunter [/align]
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    • #3
      That Was The BEAST Peom ever u better keep writing u might be in a contest some day

      good luck!

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        nice one





        keep it up



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        [align=center]شكرا للمنشد ابراهيم السعيد *كلمات رائعة* [/align]

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        • #5
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          sa7rawi is here!!!

          ,,,I saw the sky , retutn some drop of rain from the past
          the days of life take u but your brain does not forget this place

          u are more than welcome,,,          [/align]
          التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة د.نـورة; الساعة 30-07-2006, 12:50 PM.

          "أدُعــوا لي بالتوفيق ،وتحقيق طموحاتي بنيل أعلى المراتب
          والوصـول الى القمـة بـشرف "

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            Hi dear sa7rawi

            how are you doing ??

            it's so good to see you wander around the English Forum

            I'm really glad to see you here again.




            i really miss the old members who were here

            once up on a time



            you were an active member that time .. wish to see you active again



            dear brother .. your poem .. it's bright and beautiful

            the words are so strong and i feel that i'm really touched inside

            i feel that i read it before .. it's similar to what i used to write

            years ago...



            you're being creative dear brother



            i will share my thoughts of writing poetry with you

            i may help you finish it and make it complete poem



            keep it up and waiting to see your posts next time



            Really .. I'm glad to see your thread here

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            ...We live as we dream alone

            Joseph Conrad

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            • #7
              [align=left]hi sa7rawee .. itz quite nice poem but i didnt get these two lines

              Your false pride even as a sky
              in case of love poor as a fly.

              wut du mean by false pride as a sky .. i c this as a contradiction
              besides ur poem ends with some similar words .. i know u did that to keep on the rhyme but i think u have to bring other different words otherwise we call it a prose not a poem ..
              sorry 4 the critcism but thisz 4 ur sake .. and i wish u the best[/align]

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                [align=center]gamar failka
                Thanks alot for your your view ... but you exaggeriate ... it was just sort of spontanious words collected for a hidden reason

                x the hunter x
                dear hunter ... thanks for your motivation .. really i appreciate

                د.نـورةYaa ....Dr .... once again ... i am back ... but you know i am not sure if my new stay will be long or short ... let's think about today.

                moonlight00
                Thanks alot for your view ... but i would like to reveal that i m not that expert poet .... it was just a collection of words seems to be not complete ... as you said ... but the thing i aim to get is shring ideas about writing with you all ...
                so dear sis .... you are more than welcome in the field of poetry ... and i am really looking forward to benefit from each other.



                EMINEM
                dera brother,
                what you said is totally right ....
                you will find lots of contradictions even in the Shakespearian arts or within lots of works done by famous poets ..... in this two lines you mintioned:

                Your false pride even as a sky
                in case of love poor as a fly.

                Some people who pretend that they love one in this life... think that the other one's Sacrifice and Giving is mortal and fatal. as a result they take and never give .... so they become proud of that.

                while in the real love ..... there is no place for such people ... they are like flies ....

                this the idea ...
                abou t the peom
                it is not that complete ...
                my aim behind posting it here ... is just for
                the sake of getting criticised as you did thankfully

                so thanks alot ... and see you all again .
                sa7rawi [/align]
                :crying: صحـــــــــــــراوي :crying:

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